Essay Two Thesis

I believe the main requirements and purpose of this second essay is to compare two sources of information on its rhetoric and composition choices and explain which source was most effective of getting his or her point across.

Thesis: In the text ________ by ________, he/she uses more effective rhetorical devices to explain his/her thoughts compared to the other source, ________by _______ which was less effective at doing so.

Essay Concerns & Questions

1)What are you most concerned about within your essay at this point? Be specific.

-I am most concerned about my body paragraphs specifically about what other mini-claims will go into it. Finding three claims was enough but finding smaller ones in my article is much more challenging.

2) What would be most helpful to discuss/look at on Tuesday (the day the essay is due)?

-I believe looking at each article and giving a summary of each will be most helpful to the class.

Draft Response Essay One

My conversation with Cameron was about his draft ideas and article. He is selecting the article that discusses the cell phones hijacking our minds. His thesis was on point but could get a little more clear about his claim. I believe he should organize his ideas to formulate a good draft. I also believe if he can make multiple claims that will improve his paper.

Addiction to Smartphones

1. I would feel uncomfortable without constant access to information through my smartphone.  4

2. I would be annoyed if I could not look information up on my smartphone when I wanted to do so.  3

3. Being unable to get the news (e.g., happenings, weather, etc.) on my smartphone would make me nervous.  3

4. I would be annoyed if I could not use my smartphone and/or its capabilities when I wanted to do so.  4

5. Running out of battery in my smartphone would scare me.   1

6. If I were to run out of credits or hit my monthly data limit, I would panic.  1

7. If I did not have a data signal or could not connect to Wi-Fi, then I would constantly check to see if I had a signal or could find a Wi-Fi network.  1

8. If I could not use my smartphone, I would be afraid of getting stranded somewhere.   2

9. If I could not check my smartphone for a while, I would feel a desire to check it.  4

If I did not have my smartphone with me …

10. I would feel anxious because I could not instantly communicate with my family and/or friends.  3

11. I would be worried because my family and/or friends could not reach me.  3

12. I would feel nervous because I would not be able to receive text messages and calls.  3

13. I would be anxious because I could not keep in touch with my family and/or friends.  3

14. I would be nervous because I could not know if someone had tried to get a hold of me.  3

15. I would feel anxious because my constant connection to my family and friends would be broken.  3

16. I would be nervous because I would be disconnected from my online identity.  1

17. I would be uncomfortable because I could not stay up-to-date with social media and online networks.  1

18. I would feel awkward because I could not check my notifications for updates from my connections and online networks.  2

19. I would feel anxious because I could not check my email messages.  4

20. I would feel weird because I would not know what to do. 1

I received a total of 60 points placing me in the mild nomophobia, which is basically I can survive without the use of a smartphone, but I would get antsy every once in a while to use it although I’m not overwhelmed by it.

I do believe that if a person get so consumed into his or her smartphone it can effect that person behavior and intellectual thoughts. The more we rely on our phones the less independent we become. I do agree with the article however for me my test results prove that I can operate without my cellular device. Living without a phone is like living a whole separate life away from any networking and only face to face connections. My results do not support the thesis of the article because I don’t rely on my phone every second of the day.

Ways of Responding Post

When thinking about the future, to me is imagining what the world would be like as a whole and how we as people and the things we surround ourselves with have evolved. I believe when the author of the article says “futurology is almost always wrong”, because no one can really know everything that’s going to happen in the future, but I am certain that we as people mindsets will change and that will effect the thigs such as technology, cars, or clothes. People tend to focus on the materialist things that will change in the future, but with out us humans changing I believe nothing else will change in the future.

The Future of Higher Education

Future college students will face high debt after graduating college. This is because in ten years technology will be highly advance meaning students will need to learn how to operate this new technology. More education means more money. With higher education, more advance jobs in the workforce will be created. The workforce will need qualified candidates to fill these positions. Yes, these predictions are important now not just in the future. To become active in the future would mean paying a lot more for school and seeking the new advance jobs the community has to offer.